Open Question: Could you revise my essay? (Topic is on animal testing)?
Please check my grammar and enhance my essay using better word choices and sentences. You can add more info to it. Just make it better.
This is my introduction of the essay (the topic is on animal testing)
Imagine that you are a die-hard animal lover, who is facing death due to a very rare heart disease. The doctor told you that you are going to die in 1 month, unless you replace your heart with animal?s heart (with your permission). You, as a philanthropist, might wonder, whether you should die to protect animals? morality or to slay the animals for your surgery. Most people will decide to kill the animals because everyone fears death. Xenotransplantation is the is the transplantation of living cells, tissues, or organs from one species to another such as from pigs to humans. (en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Xenotransplantation) Moreover, animals have been used for polio research, stem cell research, etc. Since the first animal testing in second and fourth centuries BCE, animal testing became a very important part of the medical technology. Most of these experiments have been very successful due to abundant medical resources. Animals are also benefited from these experiments because they are the ones who are being tested. The results can be used for future treatments. Thus, animal testing is advantageous for both the animals and humans because it precipitates medical breakthroughs and is imperative to take supremacy over animals.
Mon, 09 Mar 2009 03:25:13 GMT
Open Question: My horse isn’t acting normal, please help…?
HISTORY
At the barn I ride at there is a horse which I have ridden every lesson straight for two years. He knows who I am by now, and whenever I walk up to his stall, he nickers, and comes to the door. We’re best friends.
Two years ago, the barn was going to sell him off because all the riders hated him because no matter what level the rider was, he would not move. I had first ridden him a year before that, and he had bucked me off, and then he accidentally ran over me. I had green hoof print bruises all over my body for two months after that. Naturally, I was one of those riders who was not a fan of him.
However, a year later, I decided to give him a last chance when I heard he was going away, and took the morning to watch people ride him(or try to ride him). I memorised how he moved, when he stopped, what expressions he made, and such. Finally when it came to be my lesson, I asked to ride him.
When I got on him, I made sure to be gentle and light hearted, and I encouraged him to move on, with murmurs and pats. I also made sure to squeeze him with my legs, instead of kicking, because I had noticed how he reacted negatively to kicking. By the end of the lesson, he hadn?t stopped at all. Not once. In fact, he had gone perfectly. I loved him.
The barn manager was impressed with how well he went, and decided he had potential. He wouldn?t be sold. He became my best friend, and I found it amusing how he would still only move for me. However, I knew that for him to stay at the barn, I had to get him to move for others as well. So, it became my personal project to work with him every lesson, to get him to improve. Only a couple of months later, he was a lot better. He would move(unwillingly still, and would still occasionally stop) for others if they worked hard, and didn?t lose their temper.
A year later, you only needed a crop(and still a lot of effort) and he would go almost/ entirely perfect. For these past two years I have been the main rider riding him. Occasionally there would be another person or so, but I was always there. After the first year I knew exactly what he was going to do, before he did it, and I could ?feel his thoughts? beneath me. I walked in on him when the world walked out, and it was clear that he knew that. Lately there has also been another rider, but I haven?t watched her ride him yet.
However, over the past few months, he has been moving differently. I have felt a difference in him and he has thrown a couple of bucks, and has shown resistance. This didn?t prove to be too much of a problem. This month though, it has gotten out of control. At the end of febuary, he suddenly developed a awful habit of backing up at the mounting block. I?ve fixed it by now, but it was totally unusual for him. That wasn?t the bad part though. For the past two to three weeks, he has gone fast instead of slow. He doesn?t want to stop when you want him to. He?s perfect and unusually quick at the trot, and then you get to the canter, and he goes nuts. Bucking and tossing his head, and charging and breaking into random gaits. With jumping it?s the same, but there?s more charging than bucking. When he jumps, he over jumps, and is extremely obnoxious.
At first I thought that maybe it was a problem with me, but when I watched my instructer and another rider, ride him, it was worse. I know he still knows it?s me, and he goes better with me still, but it?s a nuisance, and he?s not the same horse. He?s not the horse I fell in love with at all, and I know this. I was worried it was a health problem, but we checked him out, and he was fine. He?s so sweet on ground, and he doesn?t act like he?s in pain.
I don?t know what?s been happening but do you know what?s wrong? I?m worried about him, please help.
Overall
The horse I ride is usually lazy, but for the past few weeks he?s been charging and bucking and tossing his head. We?ve had him checked out and he?s okay, but he has gone perfectly for me(and only me) for two years. He?s doing this with everyone, and I?m worried about him. What?s wrong?
Mon, 09 Mar 2009 00:37:45 GMT
