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Open Question: Does this sound okay? Any advice?

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Open Question: Is my song any good????
Heart of Ebony
I could see your heart of ebony,
when I first looked in your eyes.
Your smile was almost flat,
and was forced upon your face.
It hit me like a rock,
to hear your unwelcoming welcome.
I’d heard much about you, and hoped you would be kind.
Heart of ebony,
heart of ebony,
why must you stay?
Please let me in your heat,
so I may melt the black away.
It brings me to tears,
how you fail to see,
the glass is better full, rather than empty.
If only you could see,
it would do the planet good,
letting us know we have the power,
to rid the world of your disease.
Heart of ebony,
heart of ebony,
why must you stay?
Please let me in your heart,
so I may melt the black away.
Today you took the time,
to pas me a sudden glance.
I saw a hint of kindness upon your face,
willing to make a change.
Longing for a friend,
that would melt the black away.
pl

Sun, 04 Apr 2010 18:03:59 GMT
Open Question: Does this sound okay? Any advice?
I felt him embrace me. I buried my head in his chest.
I felt hot tears falling into my hair. He was crying.
” I’ll.. I’ll never let this happen to you again” he murmured as he stroked my hair
” It’s.. not your fault It’s mine.” My voice barley sounded like a whisper. I felt guilt slowly creep on me
It was my fault I let Leo rape me. I’d actually enjoyed it. This was all my fault. I was more like Eve then I knew it I’d let the snake trick me. I’d excepted the apple.
The room began to black out a bit my head swam.
” Robin, Robin please stay with me” he begged
Jake lifted my crumpled body to the floor then he hesitated.
With one fluid motion he placed his right hand on where my heart was beating wildly. As though any minute it wood break out of my rib cage.
” Wait” he mumbled to himself he took of his grey shirt placing it next to him.
“Okay now.” he mumbled a strange crinkling sound came from his back and a pair of grey angel like wings grew from his back.
He folded his wings then lifted me up in his arms.
” Did he take your virginity away” he asked comely
” No but he was about to before you came” I answered with the little strength I had.
” I want you to forget everything he did to you. I want you to feel bliss where we’re going” he looked down at me their was a weird childish glint in his dark f green eyes.
Piercing blue met forest green.
I smiled I knew what I was in for next.
I meant to erase the f before the green.