Open Question: Could you read my new essay and correct it?
Hi, I am new in English and I wanna improve my writing. So, recently I have written a new essay. Could you read it and give your idea and probably catch my mistakes?
Topic:
What do you do to be healthy? Why?
Each person has different methods to be healthy. Some people believe that they should sleep eight hours every night; other group think that they should do exercise frequently, and others believe that they must not drink alcoholic drinks. This is a question that there is not a unique answer to it. However, I would divide these factors of being healthy into two groups.
First of all, from my point of view, people should pay attention to their nourishment. For instance, they should see a specialist in the nourishment frequently, and try to feed themselves with nourishing food. Some people believe that if they only eat meat, they will be healthy. On the other hand, another people are vegetarian and disagree with eating meet. However, Scientists have shown that a person who wants to be healthy should be nourished by a variety of food. For example, in my family?s diet, there are both vegetables and meat enough.
Furthermore, even though having different and nourishing food are effective to be healthy, this is not enough. We witness some people who are involved in obesity everyday. From my point of view, these people only pay attention to one of vital factors of being healthy, but there is another important factor. Scientists have shown that doing exercise is necessary for whole people. They emphasize that people, especially the old must do exercise at least twenty minutes every day. This can lessen the blood pressure, reduce the risk of heart attacks, and prevent people from many of serious diseases.
In short, there are many remarkable factors to be healthy, but two of them are more vital than others, nourishment and exercise. Unluckily, some people do not care about these factors. Even though they may feel healthy in the current time, they will feel in a different way as they become older.

Wed, 03 Dec 2008 07:17:49 GMT

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