Open Question: is this a good beginning to a story?
its about some one dealing with some issue i don’t know what is it yet but that person resides to suicidal thoughts…
My heart is being ripped out of my chest and burned into ashes. The pain that I feel is unbarring it pierces me like a sword and tears apart my soul slowly devouring my every being. I see darkness; it consumes me like the plague. I succumb this feeling and strangely feel safe in this place; no pain no fear. I crawl up to my knees and close my eyes finally resting. I let myself go and my body stops moving. I hear murmurs at my ear, then silence. A bright light attacks my senses; maybe it?s the light you see before death. I take one short weary breath and let it out. Slowly but surely fading away my last breath is taken, forever. Something brings me out of my lovely dream which should be disturbing and i open my eyes to see my little sister……
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