Open Question: Will someone please criticize my writing piece please?
I’m trying out for my high school’s Cappies team and I was required to write a sample piece to show my writing style, skill level, etc. It’s really late at night and this thing is due tomorrow, and I don’t have anyone to look over it for me. Someone please just let me know if there’s something I should change or improve. Thanks!
Here it is:
Review of the movie “The Notebook”
It?s the year 1940 in Seabrook Island, South Carolina, and the local country boy, Noah Calhoun, is clinging to a bar at the top of the Ferris wheel at a local carnival. His intentions? To gain the affections of seventeen year-old heiress Allie Hamilton, whom he has just met. Noah speaks to Allie as he dangles at an alarming distance from the safe ground, and in her desperation, she agrees to go on a date with him. Despite her promise, Allie proves to be stubborn, and Noah?s continued efforts result in rejection. One magical night, however, Allie?s stubbornness inevitably fades.
“The Notebook” received several awards following its release in 2004, including the MTV Movie Award and the Golden Satellite Award. Its total box office earnings were over $115 million worldwide. The film, which is directed by Nick Cassavetes, is based on the best-selling novel by Nicholas Sparks, whose timeless love stories warm the hearts of teenagers and adults alike.
The story is being told by the aged Noah, who is reading from a notebook to a sufferer of Alzheimer?s disease in a present-day nursing home. As he reads, the viewers are taken back in time and experience Noah and Allie?s heart wrenching tale from the lovers? perspective. Their love appears at first to be flawless and indestructible, but trouble soon intervenes with their otherwise perfect summer. Allie?s parents disapprove of Noah because of his low income and social status, and eventually insist that Allie does not see him anymore. When Allie returns to her hometown at the end of the summer, Noah is left desperate and alone. Allie is heartbroken when she receives no letters from Noah, and believes that he has moved on.
Seven years later, Allie becomes engaged to a handsome young soldier named Lon, whom her parents enthusiastically approve of. As her excessively publicized wedding day approaches, she decides to return to Seabrook to ?take care of some things,? and visits Noah for the first time since they were separated against their will. She finds more than a casual friendship with Noah, and now she must make the decision: will she be faithful to her fianc

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